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janhedger
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Posted - 27/06/2017 :  17:26:49  Show Profile  Visit janhedger's Homepage  Send janhedger an AOL message Send janhedger a Private Message  Reply with Quote
http://www.forcespoetry.com/poemdetails.asp?ID=5222

Beautiful rhythm and line rhyme like the waves of the ocean that carried the Titanic herself.

Two opening lines draw you right in to the image of the poem.

Jan

We cannot stop, because if a single one of these men were taken and shot, that would be our fault - Edith Cavell
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Rob Carson
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carlisle
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Posted - 28/06/2017 :  13:22:02  Show Profile Send Rob Carson a Private Message  Reply with Quote
Thank you, Jan, for commenting on my poem 'On Farlam Church' -which was, as ever, insightful and encouraging...
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Mac
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Posted - 27/09/2017 :  07:04:36  Show Profile  Visit Mac's Homepage Send Mac a Private Message  Reply with Quote
What a cracking read Rob, I really enjoyed that... "The moon commands the starlit sky"... love it. Thank you

Dream, Hope, Believe, Do
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Rob Carson
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carlisle
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Posted - 29/09/2017 :  22:53:14  Show Profile Send Rob Carson a Private Message  Reply with Quote
Thank you, Mac, for commenting on my poem, On Farlam Church. Always good to get positive feedback from a good source. Cheers...
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sherlock
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nottingham
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Posted - 07/10/2017 :  17:00:19  Show Profile Send sherlock a Private Message  Reply with Quote
Hi Rob. Love the last line of your poem. I would never have thought of a line like that and that is why I find your poems so interesting and enjoyable. Regards Don
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Rob Carson
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carlisle
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Posted - 10/10/2017 :  14:18:28  Show Profile Send Rob Carson a Private Message  Reply with Quote
Thank you, Don, for commenting on my poem and mentioning the last line in particular. Confess I had to refresh my memory on what it was. I was listening to a radio play and someone quoted this line, an old Italian allusion, referring to church bells as being like passing angels, which, like you, I thought very good so incorporated into the poem. Enjoy your own work very much too, and although, alas, it wasn't a flash of genius on my part I'm glad you particularly liked that last line of 'On Farlam Church..'

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